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Girl in the Wall by =Nax84:iconNax84:

Categories Literature > Prose > Fiction > Horror


Girl In The Wall

You can't see me, rotting, inside, near where you sleep, i died, but, you dont realise that, I can see you, twenty, four seven, take this, offering, find me lease get me out, I have, been, waiting for someone, to , please bury me, find me, I've died and, been trapped in a wall, it's dark, and the mice, they tear more into me, years of, a stench, covered by, perfumes of, the friendly family home...

Can't you hear, noises, upstairs, downstairs, take it in you deaf, take it in you, please find me here, I am here so find me, I am bleeding out again, repeatedly, I know I am, not here but, you take, me, out! Take me out! Take me out of this wall, my grave, your family home, take this peace, offering, or die with me one day... Die with me one day, one day, please find me, before he does again, I can't, bear it, once again, please release me, find me, please help me, I am bleeding through again, the mice, take my last toe again, discintergrate, my last thoughts were, of you, taking me out, again.

Alex Ashurst
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Author's Comments

I wrote this for another one of my deviations called Murdered in a Painted Wall. I came across it and read it, and thought I would post this as literature as well.

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~il-Saggio Jun 21, 2008, 6:19:45 AM
WOW!
Sad, indeed, but very well written. I can feel the tension, the hurry and the blind darkness of the "wall's inside". Very good. If You are able to sing You are a full artist!

I associated the rythm of your composition with Kate Bush's "under ice" [link]

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=Nax84 Jun 21, 2008, 9:30:19 PM
this was inspired by Slipknot song Purity. I probably can sing it but i prefer it to be sung in a metal voice, heavy... it will really bring out the fear just like in Purity.

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~HorrorWriters Jun 25, 2008, 9:36:51 PM
It's amazing. You're a very good writer.
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=Nax84 Jul 2, 2008, 12:12:06 AM
thank you heaps :D

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*kimpossiblelove Jul 15, 2009, 10:07:47 PM
wow you are dark I like it. -D

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=Nax84 Jul 15, 2009, 10:48:35 PM
lol oh yeah i used to be such a goth lol into horror and macabre... but i kinda fell out of it because of loss of inspiration... and it became an everyday basis kind of thing I was so bored of it. but this one is one of my faves :D

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*kimpossiblelove Jul 15, 2009, 11:01:14 PM
people change and grow but your past is your past.

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no big

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=Nax84 Jul 16, 2009, 12:38:59 AM
yeah i know, im proud of them all but i grew out of it for now

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*kimpossiblelove Jul 16, 2009, 9:04:45 AM
=D

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